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[[ī]] serena's dairy 14 - new elective class
  • ̸ : todms524
  • ۼ : 2014-05-22
  • ȸ : 1456
  • õ : 0

ְ̹ 6 떄 elective class ٲ߾! 

elective class 5 Ŀŧ ư ̻ ٴϴ 5ֿ ѹ ٲ۴ϴ
,,ŷ, ϴ pre toefl class ߽ϴ!! ݿ ѱε ..
ù! ϴ ̶ ϴ󱸿 ¹! ϴ!!
ϴ ù° brainstormimg ! ؼ ϴ
׸ ϰ ֵ 2~3 ϴ! 
׸ Introduction paragraph. ù° hook 츮󸻷 ̶ ϱ⵵.. մϴ
⼭ ַ ǹ ϴ° ٰ ϳ׿~ 
 
 
׸ ι° bridge ó ̸ ϴ κ̿ ׸ thesis ؼ ѹ մϴ!!
ι° body Ϲ 2~3κγ ù°ٵ𿡼 ٰ ϳ ϰ ι° ٵ𿡼
ι° ٰŸ  մϴ!   conclusion ѹ ݺϰ final hook Ĩϴ!!
"~ϸ " ¦ 並 ... л ƸƮ ؼ ð ̸ ϳ썻! ׸ 
Ẹ ̴ּϴ..
׷ ⼭ ϳ Ẽ󱸿! "which is better for children to grow up in the countryside or in a big city?"
ϴ country side ϰڽϴ! ׸ reason for choice good idea 1. they can play in nature 2. they live in fresh air 3. they will have good personality
reason for bad ideaδ 1. they can't experience modern facility 2. sometimes they can't receive private education ߽ϴ!! ̾ȳ׿..
Introduction paragraph Դϴ 1.hook- what's the different between someone who grow in countryside and someone who grow in bigcity?
2. bridge- if child grow in bigcity, they lose good opportunity for making good personality
3. thesis - In my opinion childeren should grow in the countryside if it;s possible
Body paragraph 1. topic sentence: If children grow up in the countryside, they can live in nature so they may become more healthy and pure person.
detail- when they are children , if they grew up in countryside , they would have more good personality and healthy than people who grew up in bigcity.
because children who live in countryside always play in nature so they become more healthy and it has high possibility to become good person.
I think that countryside life is so peaceful and most people are kind and pure. so countryside living is better than bigcity  living for children education.
And In my opinion, When we are young, we should play in the ground without any worry . Nowdays, Most children who live in bigcity are taught  from early childhood so they have no time for playing with friend.
It;s very pittifu
 
 
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